Thursday, December 4, 2008

too early

rush hour beauty
stirs sleepy salaryman
"too early for dreams"


  1. I like this whole series, but I think this one works the best. Clearest. Do you see them as a progression, or different perspectives on the same scene?

  2. I usually just aim to finish one, but this has wound up being a progression, thanks to lots of commuting time on Osaka's subways. There's at least one more stored in my cellphone which I plan on posting. I was jokingly going to title the series "The Salaryman's Sad Quartet" or however many make the cut.

    Thanks for your comments so far. Much appreciated!

  3. Subways are great prompts for haiku. What a great idea. I think giving a title to the series would work well.