Thursday, December 4, 2008

too early

rush hour beauty
stirs sleepy salaryman
"too early for dreams"

3 comments:

  1. I like this whole series, but I think this one works the best. Clearest. Do you see them as a progression, or different perspectives on the same scene?

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  2. I usually just aim to finish one, but this has wound up being a progression, thanks to lots of commuting time on Osaka's subways. There's at least one more stored in my cellphone which I plan on posting. I was jokingly going to title the series "The Salaryman's Sad Quartet" or however many make the cut.

    Thanks for your comments so far. Much appreciated!

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  3. Subways are great prompts for haiku. What a great idea. I think giving a title to the series would work well.

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